I love your blog layout!! The background is absolutely beautiful, and fits in so well with some of those classic myths where the heroes are out on the sea! I really like how your labels appear across the top of the screen—not very many of the other blogs do that. It makes everything so accessible while scrolling through your stories. Great job!!
Nicole, teach me your ways! I LOVE your blog layout!! The background is great, along with the font that you have chosen. I also like how you were able to completely center your blog on the page.
The only critique I have of your blog layout would be that although your font is adorable, it is small and somewhat difficult to read. Other than that, it all looks great!
Your introduction kept my attention the whole time, and at the end of it I was wanting to know more. I will be keeping an eye on your storybook just so I can see what happens at the dinner. It looks like it will be a good read maybe even a little craziness at their so called smooth dinners. The picture you chose was beautiful, and so is the background picture of your storybook. My least favorite part of the page was the cursive black writing. It was kind of hard to read what the words were since they were so close together. The gray font on your introduction page looked nice with the back ground, and it was very easy to read and follow along with. I found the family tree to be a nice touch. It helped me follow who belonged to what and who Helios was. Great job, I can't wait to come back to read more.
Hi Nicole. Your storybook page is set up good. The only somewhat negative thing I saw with it is that the font for the storybook guide is hard to read. I am interested in seeing how the future of this story plays out and the details of the dinner and the fights that will occur in this family dinner. I like the family picture that you added. It helps someone that is visual, like me, to understand the relationship between the characters better. You gave enough detail in the introduction to give a solid feel for how the characters and their relationship with one another and how they each act based on who was born first. I look forward to keeping up with your future stories and how the family meeting plays out. Your story could use a little more dialect to give a better feel for how the characters act toward one another.
WOW!! That was great! Let me start with your blog. The layout, background image,and the fonts on your blog looks really awesome.
Now on to your site. The layout and the background instantly hooked me in. I was hooked on and I kept on reading. The images do a great justice to the storybook as they fit perfectly. The coverpage looks really interesting and intriguing. The introduction is really detailed and flows perfectly and leads to the stories very nicely. But I think there is some issues with the coloring in the text as I see both gray and black texts. The gray kind of makes it hard to read since they are paragraphs. So I would suggest using black or a bolder color to go with your beautiful background. But it's not like I couldn't read it.
I just read one story so far and I really liked how much details you put in. I will finish the others after I finish this. But with what I have read so far, I have to say you truly did an awesome job!
I chose your story to read because I like Greek mythology. Your paragraphs are spaced out nicely. I don’t know if it was my monitor or if you changed the font color after the second paragraph. It was easy to read with the background and the font color.
The word choice was good. I had a mental image of how the Titans were sitting at the table. The choice to use the introduction to have them sit at the table to eat was nice because it gives a sense of family traditions, which is something we as humans can relate to doing.
You were ahead and already wrote the following stories and it was tempting to go ahead a read the following stories. I will look forward to reading those stories in the future. The family tree at the end was a nice touch too, because we can see the family tree. At times, I forgot who was related to who because I’m not familiar with names.
Hi Nicole! First of all, I gasped when I opened your storybook. The background is gorgeous. Then I had to check out all the pages. The images you chose work so well with the background. You have really great taste. Then I read the stories. I look forward to reading more. I love stories of Greek mythology. It is great the way you have chosen to make the gods and goddesses behave in the more modern and human characters that are doing positive things. I wonder if they get up to some mischief in your later stories, since they often did get a little carried away back in the day. Overall I do not see anything that I could add to help. It seems to me that you have done well with mechanics and grammar. The story flows and is easy to read. It is fun to read. Well done!
Your storybook is so beautiful! I love the picture, background, and colors. I feel like even the font contributed in such a nice way to your overall theme. Everything seems to compliment each other very well. The way you wrote the introduction really helped to set up the storybook. I also like how you included a family tree image at the bottom of the page because with all those characters I can see how it could go a bit confusing and difficult to keep track. The descriptive words helped me to better imagine the scene which was great! I read the first story that was from Atlas' perspective. I think it's cool the way that that's set up. It lets the reader have a better understanding of the character and what they're going through on the inside as opposed to what they actually portray/say on the outside.
First of all, the cover page of your Storybook is great! You have selected beautiful images, and made me interested to read it. (Your title also interested me!)
I also liked how you included the family tree.
There are a few typos here and there, so I would read your strories and introduction out loud to catch those. But we all have typos. so no worries!
I read Atlas, and I was impressed! You did such a great job of incorporating the Ancient Atlas with the modern Atlas! I also think you did a great job of not over explaining his myth. I think you did a very good job with the mention of him and military.
Overall, I think you did a really great job. If I have any suggestions, it would be to vary your parargraph lengths. (shorter ones and longer ones)
I had not yet your storybook yet, but am I glad that I chose to read it this week! Your title really drew me in, but the imagery and layout of your storybook got me really excited to read your introduction and stories. I just want to say, the family tree was a nice touch. I never thought to add a family tree (but I would have to create mine :p).
You did a great job with the storytelling! You've done a good job incorporating myths into your stories.
I'm not sure if you noticed or if this was intended, but on some of your pages the font color changes in parts of stories. I also find it a bit hard to read the script font on your navigation bar, but I do really like it.
I think you're doing a really good job and I look forward to reading what you write for future characters. I can't wait to see what you come up with next!
Oh my God! What an amazing idea for a storybook! I love that you are writing about the Titans after the horrors that they faced during the Greek myths. It's almost a tale of PTSD and how people try to protect their families from it.
I think that it is great that you are writing about these Titans and their lives in modern culture. I especially love the mention of the 1970s culture, full of bright colors. You are doing such an amazing job!
I did see a couple grammar mistakes, namely in Prometheus. In the fourth sentence in the second paragraph, you need to change his to him. That was mainly the only mistake that stood out to me. You are doing an amazing job with your writing, and I love your story ideas.
I am really looking forward to returning to your storybook in the future. It really intrigued me!
This is my first time on your storybook, and let me just say it made some great first impressions!
Your background is breathtaking! I love it! I have not seen anything like it on anyone else’s storybooks! I also love your imagery in your stories! Everything looks so elegant!
The only issue I saw was the grey font on grey background. I find it a little hard to see. I like the soft grey backgrounds but I think black font or maybe just a darker grey font would be easier on the eyes. Also, the size of your font in your stories is kind of on the smaller size. I think it would be more beneficial to your readers if the font was a little bit larger.
Overall, I was very impressed! I did not see any major grammar issues in your stories. Good job and good luck with the rest of your semester!
Hi Nicole! This is the first time reading your storybook and I was really impressed! I love the format of your website, it really fits well with the theme without being too distracting from the stories! Your story on Prometheus is great! I loved the beginning where you sort of start off in the middle of a situation because it kept me guessing and made me want to read on to figure out what was happening! I really liked how you used separations in your story, that is something I might add to mine when I revise my story this week! The format of your picture at the beginning, with the beginning paragraphs of your story next to it instead of below it, really integrates the picture into the story and makes it a focal point! I love that! Bring classic stories into the modern era is really creative and you do that really well in this story! Overall, amazing job and I can't wait to read more from you!
I couldn't wait to come back to your Storybook this week! I love the way that you have been writing your stories. They are so well thought out and creative. You have a very unique way of writing that really works for the stories about the Greek gods in modern day.
I enjoyed your tale about Epimetheus, although not as much as your other stories. You didn’t have a lot to go on, since I know that he isn’t huge in myths. I really like that you twisted it to make him a protector of animals, which is an afterthought for most humans. I also like how you made him a bit of a social misfit. It adds another important layer to the love of helping animals.
I still didn’t see any major grammatical errors, which really speaks for your talent. I cannot wait to read your final story!
I was so excited that this week we had to return to storybooks that we had visited before! I knew I would be returning to yours because I love Greek culture and reading about their Gods and Goddesses.
You're doing an amazing job with modernizing every story that you have written. I think you're even doing a really good job with portraying Titans that you do not have a lot of background for. (For this, I am talking about Epimetheus.) I LOVE the helping animals stuff.
I did not see any issues at all when reading your works. You're doing an amazing job! Keep it up! I look forward to reading more.
Oh and I forgot to mention that I really like the pictures the you choose to accompany your stories. Even thought the stories in a more modern setting, the image choices kind of ground it back into the classical style associated with the Greeks. Good job!
You did a good job at telling this story. I did not read the original so I don’t know how that went down but you made the story easy to read and follow along. it was a nice touch making it in a modern setting and keeping with Atlas’ personality adjusting to modern life without the titans.
I didn’t see grammatical errors or confusing parts in the story, so you did a good job at editing. You also did well on the use of paragraphs and keeping the paragraphs to one thought. I did like how in the beginning you made it seem like it was in the past, then you turned it to have it in the present times afterall. Overall I think you did an excellent job and keep up the good work.
Hi Nicole! Wow, I am blown away by your storybook! I love Greek mythology, so I was hooked after your introduction. What I like about your storybook is that you find out throughout the tales that we are in something close to the 21st century, since you talk of how they all assimilated into our current society.
With your story of Atlas, I think you did a good job of explaining how he got out of what seemed to be an eternal punishment. The only change that I would make to this story would be to make the author's note the same size, font, and color as the rest of your story, like you did with further tales.
In Prometheus' story, I think you did a good job with condensing his story, which a concern of yours in the author's note. You made the tale your own, and I like how he helps kids! I wasn't completely familiarized with his tale, so the author's note aided me greatly. To make him more 'human,' it was nice how you incorporated his liver and how he couldn't drink. Nice!
With the story of Epimetheus, a repeated comment would be to keep your font size, color and such the same. It helps with continuity and such. Maybe you should also have a line (like so ______) between the paragraphs of conversation and backstory.
With the story of Menoitios, I saw that there was no author's note. But I like how narcissistic this character is! And how he was *so* looking forward to this next year made me giggle, albeit morbid. It's a good quote to end on, if this is your last story.
It may seem like I have a lot of critiques, but I think this was beautifully written! Great job once again!
Another good story from your portfolio. That picture really caught my attention. Its really majestic and fits really well with the theme of this story. I was trying to find your storybook because I read some other stories and liked it, so I wanted to read more of it.
The dialogue is really nice. You spaced them out into paragraphs, which made it easier to read. It also added the personal touch, but I think I said that about your last story. Its true and I always like it when people put it in their stories. Some of the names were a little hard to pronounce and remember who was who, but they were different enough to make it easier to remember who did what. In the end you made another great story and I hope to read more throughout the semester.
This is the first time I have seen your Storybook and it was really wonderful! Aesthetically it did a wonderful job of putting the reader in Greece. That background is such a beautiful image! On your Atlas story it is a bit distracting having the image at the start of the story and only two or so words are able to fit alongside it. I chose to look at your Storybook for my free choice because I have always been fascinated with Greek myth. I really enjoyed the story on Atlas. It was really interesting how you detailed him being released from his duty and trying to adjust to the modern world. That is so unlike any of the other Storybooks I have read. I would like to return and read some more of your stories because I really enjoyed the first one! I look forward to seeing what else you have written. Great job!
Hi, Nicole!
ReplyDeleteI love your blog layout!! The background is absolutely beautiful, and fits in so well with some of those classic myths where the heroes are out on the sea! I really like how your labels appear across the top of the screen—not very many of the other blogs do that. It makes everything so accessible while scrolling through your stories. Great job!!
Nicole, teach me your ways! I LOVE your blog layout!! The background is great, along with the font that you have chosen. I also like how you were able to completely center your blog on the page.
ReplyDeleteThe only critique I have of your blog layout would be that although your font is adorable, it is small and somewhat difficult to read. Other than that, it all looks great!
Your introduction kept my attention the whole time, and at the end of it I was wanting to know more. I will be keeping an eye on your storybook just so I can see what happens at the dinner. It looks like it will be a good read maybe even a little craziness at their so called smooth dinners. The picture you chose was beautiful, and so is the background picture of your storybook. My least favorite part of the page was the cursive black writing. It was kind of hard to read what the words were since they were so close together. The gray font on your introduction page looked nice with the back ground, and it was very easy to read and follow along with. I found the family tree to be a nice touch. It helped me follow who belonged to what and who Helios was. Great job, I can't wait to come back to read more.
ReplyDeleteHi Nicole. Your storybook page is set up good. The only somewhat negative thing I saw with it is that the font for the storybook guide is hard to read. I am interested in seeing how the future of this story plays out and the details of the dinner and the fights that will occur in this family dinner. I like the family picture that you added. It helps someone that is visual, like me, to understand the relationship between the characters better. You gave enough detail in the introduction to give a solid feel for how the characters and their relationship with one another and how they each act based on who was born first. I look forward to keeping up with your future stories and how the family meeting plays out. Your story could use a little more dialect to give a better feel for how the characters act toward one another.
ReplyDeleteWOW!! That was great! Let me start with your blog. The layout, background image,and the fonts on your blog looks really awesome.
ReplyDeleteNow on to your site. The layout and the background instantly hooked me in. I was hooked on and I kept on reading. The images do a great justice to the storybook as they fit perfectly. The coverpage looks really interesting and intriguing. The introduction is really detailed and flows perfectly and leads to the stories very nicely. But I think there is some issues with the coloring in the text as I see both gray and black texts. The gray kind of makes it hard to read since they are paragraphs. So I would suggest using black or a bolder color to go with your beautiful background. But it's not like I couldn't read it.
I just read one story so far and I really liked how much details you put in. I will finish the others after I finish this. But with what I have read so far, I have to say you truly did an awesome job!
I chose your story to read because I like Greek mythology. Your paragraphs are spaced out nicely. I don’t know if it was my monitor or if you changed the font color after the second paragraph. It was easy to read with the background and the font color.
ReplyDeleteThe word choice was good. I had a mental image of how the Titans were sitting at the table. The choice to use the introduction to have them sit at the table to eat was nice because it gives a sense of family traditions, which is something we as humans can relate to doing.
You were ahead and already wrote the following stories and it was tempting to go ahead a read the following stories. I will look forward to reading those stories in the future. The family tree at the end was a nice touch too, because we can see the family tree. At times, I forgot who was related to who because I’m not familiar with names.
Hi Nicole!
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I gasped when I opened your storybook. The background is gorgeous. Then I had to check out all the pages. The images you chose work so well with the background. You have really great taste. Then I read the stories. I look forward to reading more. I love stories of Greek mythology. It is great the way you have chosen to make the gods and goddesses behave in the more modern and human characters that are doing positive things. I wonder if they get up to some mischief in your later stories, since they often did get a little carried away back in the day. Overall I do not see anything that I could add to help. It seems to me that you have done well with mechanics and grammar. The story flows and is easy to read. It is fun to read. Well done!
Hey there Nicole,
ReplyDeleteYour storybook is so beautiful! I love the picture, background, and colors. I feel like even the font contributed in such a nice way to your overall theme. Everything seems to compliment each other very well. The way you wrote the introduction really helped to set up the storybook. I also like how you included a family tree image at the bottom of the page because with all those characters I can see how it could go a bit confusing and difficult to keep track. The descriptive words helped me to better imagine the scene which was great! I read the first story that was from Atlas' perspective. I think it's cool the way that that's set up. It lets the reader have a better understanding of the character and what they're going through on the inside as opposed to what they actually portray/say on the outside.
Great job! I look forward to reading more!
First of all, the cover page of your Storybook is great! You have selected beautiful images, and made me interested to read it. (Your title also interested me!)
ReplyDeleteI also liked how you included the family tree.
There are a few typos here and there, so I would read your strories and introduction out loud to catch those. But we all have typos. so no worries!
I read Atlas, and I was impressed! You did such a great job of incorporating the Ancient Atlas with the modern Atlas! I also think you did a great job of not over explaining his myth. I think you did a very good job with the mention of him and military.
Overall, I think you did a really great job. If I have any suggestions, it would be to vary your parargraph lengths. (shorter ones and longer ones)
Hi Nicole,
ReplyDeleteI had not yet your storybook yet, but am I glad that I chose to read it this week! Your title really drew me in, but the imagery and layout of your storybook got me really excited to read your introduction and stories. I just want to say, the family tree was a nice touch. I never thought to add a family tree (but I would have to create mine :p).
You did a great job with the storytelling! You've done a good job incorporating myths into your stories.
I'm not sure if you noticed or if this was intended, but on some of your pages the font color changes in parts of stories. I also find it a bit hard to read the script font on your navigation bar, but I do really like it.
I think you're doing a really good job and I look forward to reading what you write for future characters. I can't wait to see what you come up with next!
Oh my God! What an amazing idea for a storybook! I love that you are writing about the Titans after the horrors that they faced during the Greek myths. It's almost a tale of PTSD and how people try to protect their families from it.
ReplyDeleteI think that it is great that you are writing about these Titans and their lives in modern culture. I especially love the mention of the 1970s culture, full of bright colors. You are doing such an amazing job!
I did see a couple grammar mistakes, namely in Prometheus. In the fourth sentence in the second paragraph, you need to change his to him. That was mainly the only mistake that stood out to me. You are doing an amazing job with your writing, and I love your story ideas.
I am really looking forward to returning to your storybook in the future. It really intrigued me!
Hi Nicole!
ReplyDeleteThis is my first time on your storybook, and let me just say it made some great first impressions!
Your background is breathtaking! I love it! I have not seen anything like it on anyone else’s storybooks! I also love your imagery in your stories! Everything looks so elegant!
The only issue I saw was the grey font on grey background. I find it a little hard to see. I like the soft grey backgrounds but I think black font or maybe just a darker grey font would be easier on the eyes. Also, the size of your font in your stories is kind of on the smaller size. I think it would be more beneficial to your readers if the font was a little bit larger.
Overall, I was very impressed! I did not see any major grammar issues in your stories. Good job and good luck with the rest of your semester!
Hi Nicole!
ReplyDeleteThis is the first time reading your storybook and I was really impressed! I love the format of your website, it really fits well with the theme without being too distracting from the stories! Your story on Prometheus is great! I loved the beginning where you sort of start off in the middle of a situation because it kept me guessing and made me want to read on to figure out what was happening!
I really liked how you used separations in your story, that is something I might add to mine when I revise my story this week! The format of your picture at the beginning, with the beginning paragraphs of your story next to it instead of below it, really integrates the picture into the story and makes it a focal point! I love that!
Bring classic stories into the modern era is really creative and you do that really well in this story! Overall, amazing job and I can't wait to read more from you!
Hello again Nicole!
ReplyDeleteI couldn't wait to come back to your Storybook this week! I love the way that you have been writing your stories. They are so well thought out and creative. You have a very unique way of writing that really works for the stories about the Greek gods in modern day.
I enjoyed your tale about Epimetheus, although not as much as your other stories. You didn’t have a lot to go on, since I know that he isn’t huge in myths. I really like that you twisted it to make him a protector of animals, which is an afterthought for most humans. I also like how you made him a bit of a social misfit. It adds another important layer to the love of helping animals.
I still didn’t see any major grammatical errors, which really speaks for your talent. I cannot wait to read your final story!
Hi Nicole!
ReplyDeleteI was so excited that this week we had to return to storybooks that we had visited before! I knew I would be returning to yours because I love Greek culture and reading about their Gods and Goddesses.
You're doing an amazing job with modernizing every story that you have written. I think you're even doing a really good job with portraying Titans that you do not have a lot of background for. (For this, I am talking about Epimetheus.) I LOVE the helping animals stuff.
I did not see any issues at all when reading your works. You're doing an amazing job! Keep it up! I look forward to reading more.
Oh and I forgot to mention that I really like the pictures the you choose to accompany your stories. Even thought the stories in a more modern setting, the image choices kind of ground it back into the classical style associated with the Greeks. Good job!
DeleteYou did a good job at telling this story. I did not read the original so I don’t know how that went down but you made the story easy to read and follow along. it was a nice touch making it in a modern setting and keeping with Atlas’ personality adjusting to modern life without the titans.
ReplyDeleteI didn’t see grammatical errors or confusing parts in the story, so you did a good job at editing. You also did well on the use of paragraphs and keeping the paragraphs to one thought. I did like how in the beginning you made it seem like it was in the past, then you turned it to have it in the present times afterall. Overall I think you did an excellent job and keep up the good work.
Hi Nicole! Wow, I am blown away by your storybook! I love Greek mythology, so I was hooked after your introduction. What I like about your storybook is that you find out throughout the tales that we are in something close to the 21st century, since you talk of how they all assimilated into our current society.
ReplyDeleteWith your story of Atlas, I think you did a good job of explaining how he got out of what seemed to be an eternal punishment. The only change that I would make to this story would be to make the author's note the same size, font, and color as the rest of your story, like you did with further tales.
In Prometheus' story, I think you did a good job with condensing his story, which a concern of yours in the author's note. You made the tale your own, and I like how he helps kids! I wasn't completely familiarized with his tale, so the author's note aided me greatly. To make him more 'human,' it was nice how you incorporated his liver and how he couldn't drink. Nice!
With the story of Epimetheus, a repeated comment would be to keep your font size, color and such the same. It helps with continuity and such. Maybe you should also have a line (like so ______) between the paragraphs of conversation and backstory.
With the story of Menoitios, I saw that there was no author's note. But I like how narcissistic this character is! And how he was *so* looking forward to this next year made me giggle, albeit morbid. It's a good quote to end on, if this is your last story.
It may seem like I have a lot of critiques, but I think this was beautifully written! Great job once again!
Another good story from your portfolio. That picture really caught my attention. Its really majestic and fits really well with the theme of this story. I was trying to find your storybook because I read some other stories and liked it, so I wanted to read more of it.
ReplyDeleteThe dialogue is really nice. You spaced them out into paragraphs, which made it easier to read. It also added the personal touch, but I think I said that about your last story. Its true and I always like it when people put it in their stories. Some of the names were a little hard to pronounce and remember who was who, but they were different enough to make it easier to remember who did what. In the end you made another great story and I hope to read more throughout the semester.
This is the first time I have seen your Storybook and it was really wonderful! Aesthetically it did a wonderful job of putting the reader in Greece. That background is such a beautiful image! On your Atlas story it is a bit distracting having the image at the start of the story and only two or so words are able to fit alongside it.
ReplyDeleteI chose to look at your Storybook for my free choice because I have always been fascinated with Greek myth. I really enjoyed the story on Atlas. It was really interesting how you detailed him being released from his duty and trying to adjust to the modern world. That is so unlike any of the other Storybooks I have read. I would like to return and read some more of your stories because I really enjoyed the first one! I look forward to seeing what else you have written. Great job!